03-04-2009, 02:39 PM | #31 |
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jajaja I don´t really know why I ask you this. I don´t even knew from where you are. Guess... things happen for something jeje
I actually know very well the spanish conquerors. My country is Uruguay and they have not just killed to own my country but the whole South America with French and Portuguese friends. By the way, nice lyrics! Don´t worry about how it may come over, you say "corny", but LOVE never is like that I hope this one please you and I also hope it´s clear enough to get that it´s about a relationship that break up when she realice that he don´t respect women at all and give a damn for all the fights for women´s equality that she´s doing. Foam in your head You said I´m too eccentric That I protest and give one´s opinion extra That many times I used to act more like a man Forgetting that I´m in a woman´s body Of course that the time I spent with you You haven´t say a thing about Cause you didn´t had nor have the gutts to say it on my face You have wait until I went away from your side To undust the so called man inside of you *You´re just dust swept under the rug You´re just piece of a dark mud Someone who only lives cause they had birthed you* It was a Saturday. I was fighting in “my own little battle of acceptance” As you used to say When you retrogade mind said that I spent more time… Swimming into the protest and in the struggle of woman liberation Than I do at home, caring for every little thing “Can´t you see that your head is filled up with foam If what you wanted was a lady maid then drive to hell! Can´t believe I gave you a part of my life” *Chorus (x2) The worser about it ain´t had knew someone like you But to know that they cover the world With the same tiny thoughts as you do have *Chorus Well... bye bye and take care |
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Hi! Sonne...so you are a girl based on the words of your free verses... but I thought you were a guy... anyway, your song is about women lib.
I have here something like... "JUST BECAUSE I'M A WOMAN, doesn't mean.. I can't drive a fast car be a good boss or smoke a cigar Being strong doesn't mean Im not feminine and it certainly doesn't make me a bitch..." Cheers!!!!
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* In school , we were taught about the fix forms of what poems should be like. So there are lots of people who when they see a poem, they would say, ahhh ah.. LOOK OUT! ITS A POEM. Its like they’re just about to step on the snake It is because of what they’ve been taught in school. But supposedly, poem is a communication wherein the author expresses his feeling to connect with others and engender the readers in its deep resonant feelings but its not just a gust of sentimentality and there is no need for complications. I’m glad that there are lot of people here in this forum who have the knack on poetry. Are we all engendered by Jewel? I think we have certain commonality, that is why we are all here in this forum. * Im not an authority in poetry though, but here are some pointers that I’ve learned from reading poems after another. In my belief, poems are more important than poets. I remember what Jewel said in an interview; "when I kinda write a lyrics, its as if you have a child, but its not yours, and you try to justify the feelings and people will get the emotion or the potency of what you were writing about" . I guess, its goes the same with poetry. No matter what, when you write a poem, you write from your soul. And if you want to write a poem to connect with others, you show us on how you see things that will show your readers a new perspective in looking at the world in a different way. Since, poetry refreshes the world. * I write poem based on imaginations. Not necessary my experiences. This poem I’ m going to share is built on love at first sight Its like one who was caught up in this mystery and denies of such involvement. Finds reasons in everything he feels and questions the reality of that feelings. HERE GOES… No Reason By : Greenpoet * Oh heart what is this Why do you flutter Why do you beat faster Oh haste, can you be calm I ‘ve never been chilled A thousand nights No, not this time For there are no reasons Why I should fall I just saw you in my youth Outside my window pane Right away, smittened by the things you do And my heart broke loose. You said hello to me and smiled My heart leapt in silence I can see in your eyes, wide ocean I can feel in my heart, a burning bush. I find no reason to be in love. For I can’t find it in my mind And Its just hard to take For I find no reason. There is no sense at all, But my heart begins to want you I opened the window To smell the flowers But still, I find no reason Is this love written all over me When I close my eyes, Why do I see you. When I dream at night Why do I see your face I see no other but you Oh no…not this crazy love I find no reason to fall in love. No reason at all.
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Wow... this was a really strong one, in my opinion
What says you I´m a woman??? Can´t I be just a man without prejudices Though I think that those men (the one without foam inside their heads) exist, I´m really a woman jaja. I thought you knew it, whatever... I will translate now another one of mines and send it, just wait a minute |
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Sorry! Better tomorrow, cause it´s dinner time
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Sorry for the delay!
This one is about the purest love that exist on earth! "Resting beside bliss" Now I´m looking at your tiny lips And I can´t help keep on falling in love with you It even scares me a little bit Cause so much love can turn against you But I don´t care as long as you want me too I remember the thousand times I´ve said “I give up” I recall the cold nights and the growing blue My heart get sad with those dark souvenirs *Then you turn around looking for me and find me My sad thoughts fall to ground and I give in you It might be part of life but for me You are the beautifulest thing I know* And I thank your father for having help to create you My life belongs to you and all of my love too Baby I´ll ever be there for you, never doubt about it! You can feel save with me because you´re part of me And I won´t let no one come near with hungry ambitions *Chorus You´re sleeping still and I don´t get tired of looking at you I don´t care what come next, though sadness may come again Because now I´ll see it from another angle I don´t care what come upon me cause I know… That my heart will keep on living through your smile I´ve found what I´ve deeply searched for I´ve found love, your love that´s more than enough *Chorus |
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Are you a man, greenpoet???
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Do I sound like a guy 2u!? thought you got my tone of voice whenever you read my previous poems. By the way, you may visit my profile by doing the right click on your mouse over my name. hahah
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03-11-2009, 07:31 PM | #39 |
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jajaja Sorry! I think I´m just too respectful to watch anothers profiles but it was very direct that you are a woman
You have very low nice voice by the way, just saying jaja Take care Ohhh.... here a fresh one I wrote recently... Hope you like it! |
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"The awakening?"
It´s five in the morning and I´m sitting on my bed with crossed legs I have spent a lifetime beside you Wearing this golden ring that you gave my one day to always recall it to me This ring almost fall from my finger because of your “it doesn´t matter me” *These are some thoughts I´m sharing with you while you sleep But tomorrow I will pack some things up and say it out loud* I truely thought that we were special, some kind of fresh and smart love unknown Then I “woke up” one day seeing this hole swallow me whole Always thought that when I stayed at home was it my own will But I come to realice that it wasn´t that way And that only let me thinking about how blind I was *These are some thoughts I´m sharing with you while you sleep But tomorrow I will pack some things up and say it out loud* The breeze woke me up and sunbeams caresses my feet You sleep peacefully beside me and snores with no shame I knew that if I persevere I would just get more cold walls This day I let it clear for once and for all Though I married you ten years ago I must say I don´t know you at all And these strange reactions of you sometimes scares me *These are some thoughts I´m sharing with you while you sleep But tomorrow I will pack some things up and say it out loud* Another month pass by and I keep on strong decided to tell you everything Though right now it ain´t convenient, but I will find the right time… *These are some thoughts I´m sharing with you while you sleep But tomorrow I will pack some things up and say it out loud* |
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Hi, Sonne , If you just let me, I love converting something to a poem. This is what I have interpreted from your writings above, which I think your song. Then tell me what you think, honestly... (if I were able to translate it poetically. ) Here goes...
THE AWAKENING Its 5 o'clock in the morning My soul is awakened by its moaning I hear nothing but the creeping sound Of a tired bones in the teeth of a hound. * Your body is next to mine But our souls is apart And this ring you gave Is like a prisoner’s cave * Many nights I pray While you sleep at night Like a meek lamb As I’m mortified Estrange by your ambiguity * Bounded by ten years I still grasp the sense of it all I tell things beyond myself I keep things to myself * I’m standing in the light While you hide behind the dark The night is shattered In the distance , my soul is Not satisfied but my heart Looks for you but you are not with me. * I no longer love you That is certain... But I still love you... But maybe I still love you. Night is so long And the day is short. *
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Oh I really love the collaboration you have going on there. It's interesting to see a different take on the same poem.
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Thank you, Kiera for the encouraging words... I hope Sonne will like it too.
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jajajajajaja I really like it! Thank you very much
Though I hope it´s clear that in my lyrics the woman it´s convinced about the fact that the relationship doesn´t work anymore and she threaten to leave everytime, but that´s something that she never get to do! What happens to many relationships! When I first saw that you sent a poem I thought you sent it because of the same title Then I saw it was another angle to see it. Take care |
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Below is my poem that I have constructed again and again. I have been teaching myself on the syllables per line (its 5,6,5,6 per line except for the last stanza which is 7,8,8,8)
It disciplines my kind of style in writing especially on poems. This poem is all about the bitter-sweet feeling one has experienced about goodbyes... *** PEARLS AND DIAMONDS By : Greenpoet The years have gone by So my pearls and diamonds Fears became by tears The day you said goodbye * When the night is dark Candle is burnt to spark To light me the path Away from pain and grief * Where does the time goes Where it went, I don’t know Life’s a passing dream Chasing clouds everyday * If I could hold time I’ll change the years gone by I’ll leave all my fears Just never say goodbye * If I can hold on to you If I can hold our memories The pearls and diamonds of my life Are the treasures my heart could hold... **end**
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