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Old 11-14-2009, 04:40 AM   #1
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Default Occult of Personality

Occult of Personality

I take the path of excess
To the palace of wisdom
Redemption is worthless
Beauty and fulfillment of the senses are priceless

I explore every vice
And indulge in deadly sins
To awaken my senses
And escape the soul’s prison

Subconscious desires rise to the surface
Instinct replaces what I’ve been taught
Morality is relative
Ambition is blind

Chaos is strangely intriguing
Like the chance to sleep with an ex lover
One more time

I left you long ago
Because your kisses lost their flavor

Now I hear the serpent laughing
As I frantically stab my hideous portrait
My past sins punish me with age

Once I’m wretched and withered
The serpent smiles
And then slithers away
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Old 11-14-2009, 06:36 PM   #2
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This is really good. It reminds me of the work of Enigma. Are you familiar with them?
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Thanks. No I am not familiar with them. This poem was inspired by Dorian Gray which is one of my favorite stories. I think it would be interesting if we could each view our souls, the way Dorian viewed his picture. Hope all is well.

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Old 11-18-2009, 11:42 AM   #4
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I agree. I'm a fan of Oscar Wilde and now that you mention one of his best works as inspiration, I can see it in your poem.

Really good !!!
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