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01-24-2009, 06:25 AM
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Kisses Indicate
Hello, it's great to be here with so many fellow Jewel fans. Anyways, these are two of my poems, I'd love feedback if anyone has the time.
Kisses Indicate I can leave the place where time stops Just outside reality I can leave the place where time stops Material paradise vanishes Censored screams whispered They're spectacular with the vernacular of confusion Kisses indicate the illusion There's correlations between your lacerations Watch the sunrise And fall asleep in your arms Coffee kisses at sunset And wake me from my dreams Censored screams whispered They're spectacular with the vernacular of confusion Kisses indicate the illusion There's correlations between your lacerations Sweet Sweet Soulmates Everyday, my love for you grows Filling my heart, till it overflows Crystal blue eyes And strawberry lips Velvet white skin And beautiful hips With kisses so deep And caresses so sweet I slide into serenity And find paradise When we make love So from the depths of my soul To the heights of my heart I promise you darling We'll never part Because we're soulmates Sweet sweet soulmates www.myspace.com/jabble524 |
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01-24-2009, 03:34 PM
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Hi jabble:
I like these two poems. Specially the first one.  Keep on writting!!! Take care, Sonne |
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01-24-2009, 08:46 PM
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Yeah I agree, they're really good and I especially love the first one. I melt when I hear poetry like that!!! Beautiful
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03-02-2009, 05:35 AM
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Thanks.
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