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Old 03-04-2009, 02:39 PM   #31
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jajaja I don´t really know why I ask you this. I don´t even knew from where you are. Guess... things happen for something jeje

I actually know very well the spanish conquerors. My country is Uruguay and they have not just killed to own my country but the whole South America with French and Portuguese friends.

By the way, nice lyrics! Don´t worry about how it may come over, you say "corny", but LOVE never is like that

I hope this one please you and I also hope it´s clear enough to get that it´s about a relationship that break up when she realice that he don´t respect women at all and give a damn for all the fights for women´s equality that she´s doing.

Foam in your head

You said I´m too eccentric
That I protest and give one´s opinion extra
That many times I used to act more like a man
Forgetting that I´m in a woman´s body
Of course that the time I spent with you
You haven´t say a thing about
Cause you didn´t had nor have the gutts to say it on my face
You have wait until I went away from your side
To undust the so called man inside of you

*You´re just dust swept under the rug
You´re just piece of a dark mud
Someone who only lives cause they had birthed you*

It was a Saturday. I was fighting in “my own little battle of acceptance”
As you used to say
When you retrogade mind said that I spent more time…
Swimming into the protest and in the struggle of woman liberation
Than I do at home, caring for every little thing
“Can´t you see that your head is filled up with foam
If what you wanted was a lady maid then drive to hell!
Can´t believe I gave you a part of my life”

*Chorus (x2)

The worser about it ain´t had knew someone like you
But to know that they cover the world
With the same tiny thoughts as you do have

*Chorus



Well... bye bye and take care
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Old 03-05-2009, 01:45 AM   #32
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Hi! Sonne...so you are a girl based on the words of your free verses... but I thought you were a guy... anyway, your song is about women lib.
I have here something like...
"JUST BECAUSE I'M A WOMAN, doesn't mean..
I can't drive a fast car
be a good boss
or smoke a cigar
Being strong doesn't mean
Im not feminine and it certainly doesn't make me
a bitch..."

Cheers!!!!
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Old 03-05-2009, 04:23 AM   #33
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I couldn´t enter in the Abscence of fear, greenpoet . Couldn´t you just send it in here???
Below is a copy of the message I wrote in Poetry 101 under Absence of Fear Section
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In school , we were taught about the fix forms of what poems should be like. So there are lots of people who when they see a poem, they would say, ahhh ah.. LOOK OUT! ITS A POEM. Its like they’re just about to step on the snake It is because of what they’ve been taught in school. But supposedly, poem is a communication wherein the author expresses his feeling to connect with others and engender the readers in its deep resonant feelings but its not just a gust of sentimentality and there is no need for complications. I’m glad that there are lot of people here in this forum who have the knack on poetry. Are we all engendered by Jewel? I think we have certain commonality, that is why we are all here in this forum.
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Im not an authority in poetry though, but here are some pointers that I’ve learned from reading poems after another. In my belief, poems are more important than poets. I remember what Jewel said in an interview; "when I kinda write a lyrics, its as if you have a child, but its not yours, and you try to justify the feelings and people will get the emotion or the potency of what you were writing about" . I guess, its goes the same with poetry.
No matter what, when you write a poem, you write from your soul. And if you want to write a poem to connect with others, you show us on how you see things that will show your readers a new perspective in looking at the world in a different way. Since, poetry refreshes the world.
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I write poem based on imaginations. Not necessary my experiences.
This poem I’ m going to share is built on love at first sight Its like one who was caught up in this mystery
and denies of such involvement. Finds reasons in everything he feels and questions the reality of that feelings.

HERE GOES…

No Reason
By : Greenpoet
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Oh heart what is this
Why do you flutter
Why do you beat faster
Oh haste, can you be calm
I ‘ve never been chilled
A thousand nights
No, not this time
For there are no reasons
Why I should fall
I just saw you in my youth
Outside my window pane
Right away, smittened by the things you do
And my heart broke loose.
You said hello to me and smiled
My heart leapt in silence
I can see in your eyes, wide ocean
I can feel in my heart, a burning bush.
I find no reason to be in love.
For I can’t find it in my mind
And Its just hard to take
For I find no reason.
There is no sense at all,
But my heart begins to want you
I opened the window
To smell the flowers
But still, I find no reason
Is this love written all over me
When I close my eyes,
Why do I see you.
When I dream at night
Why do I see your face
I see no other but you
Oh no…not this crazy love
I find no reason to fall in love.
No reason at all.

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Old 03-05-2009, 08:33 PM   #34
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Wow... this was a really strong one, in my opinion

What says you I´m a woman??? Can´t I be just a man without prejudices
Though I think that those men (the one without foam inside their heads) exist, I´m really a woman jaja. I thought you knew it, whatever...

I will translate now another one of mines and send it, just wait a minute
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Old 03-05-2009, 08:35 PM   #35
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Sorry! Better tomorrow, cause it´s dinner time

Bye bye
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Old 03-08-2009, 11:46 AM   #36
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Sorry for the delay!

This one is about the purest love that exist on earth!


"Resting beside bliss"

Now I´m looking at your tiny lips
And I can´t help keep on falling in love with you
It even scares me a little bit
Cause so much love can turn against you
But I don´t care as long as you want me too
I remember the thousand times I´ve said “I give up”
I recall the cold nights and the growing blue
My heart get sad with those dark souvenirs

*Then you turn around looking for me and find me
My sad thoughts fall to ground and I give in you
It might be part of life but for me
You are the beautifulest thing I know*

And I thank your father for having help to create you
My life belongs to you and all of my love too
Baby I´ll ever be there for you, never doubt about it!
You can feel save with me because you´re part of me
And I won´t let no one come near with hungry ambitions

*Chorus

You´re sleeping still and I don´t get tired of looking at you
I don´t care what come next, though sadness may come again
Because now I´ll see it from another angle
I don´t care what come upon me cause I know…
That my heart will keep on living through your smile
I´ve found what I´ve deeply searched for
I´ve found love, your love that´s more than enough

*Chorus
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Old 03-10-2009, 11:59 AM   #37
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Are you a man, greenpoet???
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Old 03-11-2009, 04:02 AM   #38
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Do I sound like a guy 2u!? thought you got my tone of voice whenever you read my previous poems. By the way, you may visit my profile by doing the right click on your mouse over my name. hahah
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Old 03-11-2009, 07:31 PM   #39
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jajaja Sorry! I think I´m just too respectful to watch anothers profiles but it was very direct that you are a woman

You have very low nice voice by the way, just saying jaja

Take care

Ohhh.... here a fresh one I wrote recently... Hope you like it!
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Old 03-11-2009, 07:34 PM   #40
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"The awakening?"

It´s five in the morning and I´m sitting on my bed with crossed legs
I have spent a lifetime beside you
Wearing this golden ring that you gave my one day to always recall it to me
This ring almost fall from my finger because of your “it doesn´t matter me”

*These are some thoughts I´m sharing with you while you sleep
But tomorrow I will pack some things up and say it out loud*

I truely thought that we were special, some kind of fresh and smart love unknown
Then I “woke up” one day seeing this hole swallow me whole
Always thought that when I stayed at home was it my own will
But I come to realice that it wasn´t that way
And that only let me thinking about how blind I was

*These are some thoughts I´m sharing with you while you sleep
But tomorrow I will pack some things up and say it out loud*

The breeze woke me up and sunbeams caresses my feet
You sleep peacefully beside me and snores with no shame
I knew that if I persevere I would just get more cold walls
This day I let it clear for once and for all
Though I married you ten years ago I must say I don´t know you at all
And these strange reactions of you sometimes scares me

*These are some thoughts I´m sharing with you while you sleep
But tomorrow I will pack some things up and say it out loud*

Another month pass by and I keep on strong decided to tell you everything
Though right now it ain´t convenient, but I will find the right time…

*These are some thoughts I´m sharing with you while you sleep
But tomorrow I will pack some things up and say it out loud*
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Old 03-13-2009, 07:53 AM   #41
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Hi, Sonne , If you just let me, I love converting something to a poem. This is what I have interpreted from your writings above, which I think your song. Then tell me what you think, honestly... (if I were able to translate it poetically. ) Here goes...

THE AWAKENING

Its 5 o'clock in the morning
My soul is awakened by its moaning
I hear nothing but the creeping sound
Of a tired bones in the teeth of a hound.
*
Your body is next to mine
But our souls is apart
And this ring you gave
Is like a prisoner’s cave
*
Many nights I pray
While you sleep at night
Like a meek lamb
As I’m mortified
Estrange by your ambiguity
*
Bounded by ten years
I still grasp the sense of it all
I tell things beyond myself
I keep things to myself
*
I’m standing in the light
While you hide behind the dark
The night is shattered
In the distance , my soul is
Not satisfied but my heart
Looks for you but you are not with me.
*
I no longer love you
That is certain...
But I still love you...
But maybe I still love you.
Night is so long
And the day is short.
*
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Old 03-13-2009, 08:45 AM   #42
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Oh I really love the collaboration you have going on there. It's interesting to see a different take on the same poem.

Makes for very interesting and enjoyable reading!
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Old 03-13-2009, 09:04 AM   #43
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Thank you, Kiera for the encouraging words... I hope Sonne will like it too.
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Old 03-13-2009, 02:51 PM   #44
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jajajajajaja I really like it! Thank you very much

Though I hope it´s clear that in my lyrics the woman it´s convinced about the fact that the relationship doesn´t work anymore and she threaten to leave everytime, but that´s something that she never get to do!
What happens to many relationships!

When I first saw that you sent a poem I thought you sent it because of the same title Then I saw it was another angle to see it.

Take care
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Old 03-16-2009, 11:20 AM   #45
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Below is my poem that I have constructed again and again. I have been teaching myself on the syllables per line (its 5,6,5,6 per line except for the last stanza which is 7,8,8,8)
It disciplines my kind of style in writing especially on poems.
This poem is all about the bitter-sweet feeling one has experienced about goodbyes...
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PEARLS AND DIAMONDS
By : Greenpoet

The years have gone by
So my pearls and diamonds
Fears became by tears
The day you said goodbye
*
When the night is dark
Candle is burnt to spark
To light me the path
Away from pain and grief
*
Where does the time goes
Where it went, I don’t know
Life’s a passing dream
Chasing clouds everyday
*
If I could hold time
I’ll change the years gone by
I’ll leave all my fears
Just never say goodbye
*
If I can hold on to you
If I can hold our memories
The pearls and diamonds of my life
Are the treasures my heart could hold...
**end**
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